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All Deviations


If it's an emotion, it's one of a multitude of choices.
Like holding onto someone and watching the moon,
Like the feeling you get while drowning out the voices,
Like strangling him now, in your hands, can't be too soon.
If it's a sight, there are so many there's no way to see them all,
However, the first red you'll ever see is that on the ground,
With a shocked look on his face, his last breath a boarding call,
Like some kind of hellish, damned soul laced lost and found.
If it's a sound, then there are only a few, from sad to loud.
If it's sad, it's a dull red, like a violin that carves notes to bone.
If it's loud, then it's a piercing scream, nothing slightly proud,
Like someone who's found his hand has just turned to stone.
If red is a soul, then there is one, and only one, thing it can be,
And that's a soul's last blazing fight for life, the worst red to see.
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Try to figure out the symbolism, I dare you. Saying this, yes, I know that no one will actually get it, but hey, here's to hoping, right? haha, yeah, I know it seems like these last two are a bit depressed, but bear with me, I'm just figuring out some pretty complicated things in life right now, such as which way is up, which way is down, and what the reasons for certain psychio-astrological phenomenon, such as consciousness, exist. Hooray.
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~promontorium:iconpromontorium: Mar 24, 2008, 3:51:23 AM
If you ask me to define your symbolism I can't. Not particularly when the prospect of any reverence of astrology could be in play in the mind. But for reality, red is a classic symbol of passion, and love. The heart being the source of red, it both gives you life and declares your death when red becomes literal.

Though I only mention any of this because I really felt it from the dull red to the blazing fight. Very romantic indeed.
*waterearthgoddess:iconwaterearthgoddess: Mar 24, 2008, 4:26:48 AM
that was really good.



Like I'm going to be able to guess the symbolism.


I don't think it is about love, though.


I really like the last line of the poem. :)

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Literature adds to reality, it does not simply describe it. It enriches the necessary competencies that daily life requires and provides; and in the respect, it irrigates the deserts that our lives have already become.
~CS Lewis
~grey88:icongrey88: Mar 25, 2008, 12:00:23 AM
Very well put, you're perceptive. Romance is one part of the symbolism.

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Do you know what happens when you get an airsoft gun, some isopropal alcohol, a lighter, and a few thousand cue tips? I'll give you a clue--I live on the third floor of a guy's dorm--there's not a single person on earth who will know what happened but me.
~grey88:icongrey88: Mar 25, 2008, 12:25:14 AM
Aheh... you might want to take a closer look at lines 10-14. Let's just put it this way--a part of my view of red is my previous experiences concerning dating, which is a part of how I see love, by rights.

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Do you know what happens when you get an airsoft gun, some isopropal alcohol, a lighter, and a few thousand cue tips? I'll give you a clue--I live on the third floor of a guy's dorm--there's not a single person on earth who will know what happened but me.
*waterearthgoddess:iconwaterearthgoddess: Mar 25, 2008, 11:26:19 AM
oh.


It's just, when I think of you, I don't think of, well, dating/writing poetry on dating. This is going to take some adjustment. I need to reread your poem.

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Literature adds to reality, it does not simply describe it. It enriches the necessary competencies that daily life requires and provides; and in the respect, it irrigates the deserts that our lives have already become.
~CS Lewis
~grey88:icongrey88: Mar 26, 2008, 2:39:08 AM
O.O' That's interesting. And who's to say that there aren't already a few (of many) posted that go solely along those lines?

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Do you know what happens when you get an airsoft gun, some isopropal alcohol, a lighter, and a few thousand cue tips? I'll give you a clue--I live on the third floor of a guy's dorm--there's not a single person on earth who will know what happened but me.
*waterearthgoddess:iconwaterearthgoddess: Mar 26, 2008, 9:35:03 AM
no one. you usually discourage that kind of talk, so i do not normally associate you with that. should i apologize?

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Literature adds to reality, it does not simply describe it. It enriches the necessary competencies that daily life requires and provides; and in the respect, it irrigates the deserts that our lives have already become.
~CS Lewis
~Blak-image713:iconBlak-image713: Mar 29, 2008, 8:32:40 PM
well.. definitely got the mixed emotions in there. like it's love and one feeling that is definitely not love. very depressing, yet you still got that tint of hope in the beginning. From my perspective, it's love, but with the doubts and the sort of bloody crap my friends like to talk about or do. then again... my perspective. o_o'

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My life is incomplete knowing that you're not with me.
I'm challenged with confusion and pain...

What is wrong with me? What did I do to deserve this?

Nothing. Absolutely nothin.
~grey88:icongrey88: Apr 7, 2008, 8:51:46 AM
A well put guess. Grat's, you're partly right.

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Do you know what happens when you get an airsoft gun, some isopropal alcohol, a lighter, and a few thousand cue tips? I'll give you a clue--I live on the third floor of a guy's dorm--there's not a single person on earth who will know what happened but me.